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Some feel that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While some people critic the fact that
sports
 are taught in schools, as they seem it like a waste of resources, some others claim that
sports
 are a crucial part of the scholar life. In
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 both views will be analysed and discussed. A lot of people raise their voices against the practice of
sports
 in schools, they argue that those resources invested in
sports
 could be used in more useful subjects that will have more impact in the students’ future.
For instance
, learning about soccer or basketball becomes a waste of time for someone who wants to be an Architect or an Economist. Following
this
 idea,
sports
 and physical education should not be taught and
instead
, some other general subjects should replace them.
On the contrary
, other people support the idea that
sports
 are extremely important in the development of a healthier lifestyle, that’s why it should be imparted in schools. Even if a student does not become an athlete, it is necessary that they keep a healthy lifestyle, and usually, it requires the practice of any sport. Just to mention an example, if it wasn´t for the practice of running and playing football since my primary school, I should not have acquired the discipline to do it daily in my adulthood. That’s why it is important to create those routines from the school. Having discussed both points of view, I would say that I could not agree more with those who claim that learning
sports
 in
institute
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 is useful and even, necessary.
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