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Some people think adults should learn practical skills by themselves, while others think they should learn with teachers in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #adults #skills #teachers #classroom
Learning practical skills is an important part of any individual in today's world. Lacking
of
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of
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seems
unecessary
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unnecessary
necessary
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difficult
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 to compete in
fast moving
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 life. Whether we learn skills from themself or from
teacher
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the teacher
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, both are equally beneficial.
Approach
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 of each individual will determine the growth of the nation. Individual learning of
it's
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 own is useful in the sense that it will help him to understand the basics very well. As you know human being learn from mistakes, it increases
the
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 effectiveness and output. It helps in professional
development
.
For Instance
,
surgeon
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the surgeon
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 raises his skill level by performing
the
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 good volume of surgeries and improving the practice.
Although
, it involves
lot
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 of time and hard work. Learning from
teacher
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a teacher
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 in
classroom
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the classroom
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 is equally beneficial as it easy to grab and it is from
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authentic
athentic
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 source.
Also
, we can
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 the
teacher
 in class and it makes the learning lucid.
For instance
,
learing
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learning
driving
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about driving
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 in a school is perfect only when we learn under
supervision
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the supervision
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 of the
teacher
.
However
, it
need
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 time and money.
Class
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The class
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teacher
 judges the person very well and
guide
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 him
accordingly
. In conclusion, individual learning or classroom learning, both
carries
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 equal importance for personal
development
. Both
plays
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 a vital role in personal
development
 at
specific
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a specific
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 period of time. Nation
development
 is dependent on
individual's
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an individual's
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 personality
development
.
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