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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
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Many
people
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 believe that all
education
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 and healthcare should be funded by the
government
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 and free for everyone. To a certain point, I would agree with the idea, but I
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 believe that
citizens
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 should take some responsibility for their children's
education
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 and treatment for the family. For some reasons,many
people
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 believe that
education
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 and healthcare should be funded by the
government
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 and offered to the
citizens
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 without any cost.Most
people
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 implement the tax obligations and they will get some benefits from
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government
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the government
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 from free
education
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 and healthcare for their children.The truth is
education
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 is essential for the development of the country.By providing free
education
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 to the
citizens
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,it is hoped that will contribute to improving the quality of
education
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 and more genius would be created for the country.So free
education
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 must be treated as an investment by the authority for the national interest. One of the reasons to protest the idea is that free medical services
makes
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 some
people
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 irresponsible of their health condition.The election is during the covid-19 pandemic,many
people
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 doubted the effectiveness of vaccines,which make it difficult for the
government
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 to manage the vaccine stockpile.
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,the private fund for
education
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make
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 the schooling system more effective as guardians are more conscious of taking care of their children's learning.
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 makes guardians have responsible for their
relatives
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relative's
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 health condition and
education
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. In conclusion, I support that a
government
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 should provide free
education
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 and medication to its
citizens
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. But I
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 believe that
people
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 should
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 be responsible for their own betterment when it comes to getting
the
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an
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education
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 and medical service.
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