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Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental problems are becoming an issue and some
people
 think that the cost of fuel should be increased by local governments in order to deal with
this
 situation. I strongly disagree with the statement and in
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 I will discuss that there are better options to tackle environmental issues. Global
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warming
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worming
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warming
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, water and air pollution and other global problems are constantly increasing. Some
people
 believe that making
the
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petrol more
expencive
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expensive
, will help somehow to reduce pollutants and so help the environment.
Although
 the transportation industry is one of the main
problem
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, is not by increasing the cost of fuel that you will solve
this
 issue. In fact, if we really want to make an impact, we need to profoundly
change
 the whole industry.
For example
, investing in more sustainable and
carbon free
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 energies that can power our cars or buses or even trains. The most interesting technology is the use of hydrogen for cars and other vehicles. Nissan
car
 manufacturer
,
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 has recently developed and produced a
car
 that utilises
only
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 hydrogen and the waste is water. Governments should give more incentives to the
people
 that want to buy a new
car
, allowing them to buy a hydrogen
car
. They should make new laws that ban the production of cars that depends on fossil fuels. In
this
way
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 we can drastically
change
 the world into a cleaner one. To conclude, many
people
 think that to reduce environmental issues, governments should increase the cost of fuels, while I
stronly
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strongly
 disagree with that as it is known that to make an impact and
change
this
 negative trend the whole transportation industry has to
change
 towards a more sustainable path.
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