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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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While some people believe that teaching
art
 to children is important, others, think it is just a waste of time. In
this
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 I will discuss why studying
art
 is important but
also
 why some people think the opposite. Teaching
art
 in schools could have a positive impact
in
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 children as it helps them to develop
creativity
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 skills that are necessary
in
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 every activity or
job
 later in life. In fact, especially at a young age, students
needs
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 to express their emotions and characters through artistic activities.
Moreover
, studying ancient
art
 as well as contemporary
art
 might motivate some of them to become artists or
art
 professors at university.
However
, in
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today's
today
todays
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world
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 most
of
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the
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job
 positions require a strong knowledge
in
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 mathematics. Because of
this
, it is surely more important for young students to spend more time studying other topics
instead
 of learning ancient
art
.
For example
, if you are very good at math you can apply for universities
such
 as software engineering and you will probably find a
job
 right after your studies.
In addition
 to that, it gives you a better salary which in turn will allow you to be
indipentend
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independent
 at a young age. To conclude, it is
importnat
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important
 for children to study
art
 and develop creativity,
however
, in
this
 modern
world
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 it is advantageous to spend more time learning math and
other scientific topic
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another scientific topic
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 as it will be easier to apply for a
job
.
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