Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Discipline is an important component of any child's life. It
help
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them to become a good member of
society
and good
society
makes
great
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nation. People always argue that, whether
children
should learn
manners
from
parents
or teacher. I will explain both of the aspects in my views.
Finally
,
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will share my stance on
this
.
Besides
education, school is responsible for the social
development
of a child. Teacher
help
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them learning basic
manners
like eating, hand
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hygiene
, respecting elders , etc.
For example
,
children
learn how to behave in
classroom
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the classroom
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and how to help elders in crossing road.
Other
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group feels that
parents
play a big role in teaching
children
good
manners
.
Mostly
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parents
spend
lot
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of time with
kids
at home and they can teach them easily.
For instance
, how to greet someone, when any visitor come to your place. I believe that both play
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role in
child's
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a child's
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social
development
. Many
school
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has special classes on teaching
manners
to
kids
. They help them in physical, emotional and social
development
. After school, it is the responsibility of the
parents
to teach them. As
kids
are closing watching the
parents
and it is said that most of the
manners
chidren
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children
inherit from their
parents
.
For example
, getting up early in
morning
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the morning
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kids
learn from their
parents
. I conclusion, I think that teacher
as well as
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, as well as parents,
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parents
play a great role in teaching kid
manners
.
Children
are the pillar of
the
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society
. Ultimately,
good
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a good
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society
leads to
nation
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development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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