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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in local hotel. In their feeback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter, 1. say what the participants liked about the hotel 2. explain why they were unhappy about the food 3. suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express to you about the experience of our team members in your hotel as mostly everything was so well organized but there were a few complaints by our team members about your food. To be honest, the way your hotel staff welcomed our team members was superb because everyone was happy with the little gestures by them
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, room service was
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 topnotch, no one felt any discomfort and enjoyed the pleasant view from windows within
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 of room
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, the extra services like laundry, pool and indoor gym were cherry on a cake.
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, the only thing which interrupted the flawless experience was below-average food to be more specific there were numerous
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dishes which was overcooked and some of them were
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 much spicy to eat which strongly affected the experience of coworkers. As
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 or solution, you can give instructions to your chiefs to re-evaluate your dishes and make them more authentic to mitigate
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 type of complaint in future. I hope you will work on it, Best Regards, Rajat Verma.

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structural coherence
Separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs for better clarity. For example, dedicate separate paragraphs for each point: what participants liked, issues with the food, and suggestions for improvement.
content development
Elaborate a bit more on the food issues to provide a clearer picture, which can help in achieving a fully developed response.
greeting closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, setting a good tone for formal correspondence.
task coverage
The writer addresses all parts of the task competently, covering what participants liked, the issues with the food, and providing suggestions for improvement.
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