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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can be solved?

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The given bar chart portrays the statistics of the use of
Internet
 access in urban/suburban and rural houses of a particular country for consecutive
years
 from 2011 to 2016. It is evident that the main trend of
Internet
 use was skyrocketed overall in the given
years
 in both
homes
. In 2011, city sided residences were using 15% of the
Internet
, which was almost fifth-folded than of country sided (3%). Both of them ballooned up in the
next
years
 too, and in 2014, urban/suburban and rural
homes
 used the
Internet
 more than three times and five times from starting year, with 50% and 15%, respectively.
However
, the tendency became slower in the
last
 2
years
 for city
homes
 with the exception of rural
homes
. It had exaggerated from 25% to 35%, for the rural area, but urban
homes
 just showed an increase of 2%, (from 53% to 55%). So, the graph has shown the main inflation craze in rural dwellings compared to those of urban/suburban.
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