People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer. new experiences career preparation increased knowledge Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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classes
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in college or university is widely popular with several benefits
such
as gaining new experiences, career preparation or increasing our
knowledge
.
However
, I believe that the most crucial reason why people attend
to
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the
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advanced
education
is increasing
knowledge
which I will discuss now.
First
, normally, people spend three to four years in advanced
education
, and during that time, they spend most of the time the lecture rooms, study from the professors, maybe occasionally study in
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trip or do the experiment in the laboratory. But why people need to spend
long
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time studying in small rooms together? The reason is that the lessons they learn
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extremely specific and advanced
education
which can be passed the
knowledge
only from highly skilled professors.
Furthermore
, in the
last
year, students usually have to do
the
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project that using every
knowledge
in their field. It is not only the outcome of the project but
also
the process
which
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in which

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they participate
with
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that improve their ability and potential.
Finally
, well prepared systemic educational system
also
provide the best solution to enhance the
students
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ability in
the
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theoretical and practical ways in just only a few years.
This
is not means that
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in advanced
education
is not useful for gaining new experiences or career preparation. With four years spending in college or in the university, they probably
also
obtain much of those.
However
,
exclusive
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advanced curriculum and the educational system could provide lots of
knowledge
which I strongly agree
that
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is the most important reason to attend advanced
education
.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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