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People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer. new experiences career preparation increased knowledge Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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 in college or university is widely popular with several benefits
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 as gaining new experiences, career preparation or increasing our
knowledge
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.
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, I believe that the most crucial reason why people attend
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advanced
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 is increasing
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 which I will discuss now.
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, normally, people spend three to four years in advanced
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, and during that time, they spend most of the time the lecture rooms, study from the professors, maybe occasionally study in
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 trip or do the experiment in the laboratory. But why people need to spend
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 time studying in small rooms together? The reason is that the lessons they learn
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 extremely specific and advanced
education
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 which can be passed the
knowledge
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 only from highly skilled professors.
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, in the
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 year, students usually have to do
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 project that using every
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 in their field. It is not only the outcome of the project but
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 the process
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 they participate
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that improve their ability and potential.
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, well prepared systemic educational system
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 provide the best solution to enhance the
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 ability in
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theoretical and practical ways in just only a few years.
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 is not means that
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 in advanced
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 is not useful for gaining new experiences or career preparation. With four years spending in college or in the university, they probably
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 obtain much of those.
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,
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 advanced curriculum and the educational system could provide lots of
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 which I strongly agree
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that
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is the most important reason to attend advanced
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