It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the past, there were many untouched places
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the earth, but, now most of these remotely located areas have been explored by not only
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but researchers as well. As far as I am concerned
this
trend equally brings both advantages and disadvantages to
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.
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essay will support my points in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, being explored
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hostile areas like
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Pole, could light into the remote living.
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, how to live in an extreme climate lights answer to many mysteries of the earth: physical adaptions, dietary patterns and living styles of natives of these locations seem to provide some new ideas to science and technology, which, eventually, beneficial to the entire mankind to make necessary adaption to changing climate situations.
However
, If explorations did not occur, we would unaware of
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of making
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to counteract various environmental repercussions;
therefore
,
this
is an astonishingly commendable step.
On the other hand
, despite the
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positives, I am seriously sceptical about expanding
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industry to these vulnerable places.
Although
visiting these can be a great personal achievement, the aftermath of
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could be huge since
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tend to behave
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most of the time. To illustrate, in a BBC documentary, how much damage has been caused to
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Pole is so evident and thought-provoking.
Native
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population of both flora and fauna, which are highly susceptible to
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unless all governments act timely, the consequences might be irreparable, so in my opinion,
this
is obviously a worrying situation. In conclusion, looking into the two accepts of the exploration of visitors and research fellows,
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I am confused whether it is beneficial or harmful since it is too early to make an assumption. It is vital that under no circumstance, should damage the delicate nature for human benefits.
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