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Some people prefer to live with a roommate. Others prefer to live alone. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two options do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer

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It is often discussed whether it is better to share a room with someone, known or unknown, or not and enjoy the loneliness. The paragraphs below will outline both sides of
this
 trend and
then
 expose the author's opinion about it. On the one hand, people argue that living with a roommate brings joy and happiness, as they are spending time together, they are more likely to develop a relationship and share interesting moments to be remembered.
For instance
, when a person rents a university's accommodation, normally, the
first
 individual they will probably develop a bond, will be the one sleeping in the same room. It is
also
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 since housing tasks would be divided by two.
On the other hand
, some individuals depart from
this
, claiming that living alone have
also
 positive aspects.
For instance
, many individuals have hobbies that might be considered eccentric or disturbing for others, as learning a new instrument or creating an exotic animal, like a snake or cockroaches; so living
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 their own would not be problematic, as they would enjoy these leisures without convincing anyone to do the same.
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 aspect to be considered is being able to organize your furniture by your taste.
Thus
, having your own space would avoid being
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 by surprise by any undesired situation with your belongings. In my opinion, both sides have their merits,
although
, I tend to believe that sharing a room with someone could be more pleasant, as if I develop a friendship with someone, all duties, feelings and annoyances could be talked about and, thereby, a consensus reached.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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