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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain what experience and special skills you have •explain why you are interested in the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 epistle regarding the advertisement
that is
 published,In fact, I want to apply for
this
 work. Let me start with an introduction about myself,
first,
my name is Raheel Alsh,
second,
I practice law in the morning and I just relocated to
this
 city, and
thus
 after four hours of hard work, I have nothing to do. Moving onto the heart of the matter, I have strong experience in both English and Arabic languages with high skills
such
 as teamwork,cooperation, and time management.
Moreover
, I am already trained in risk management in the government sector. Honestly, I really do want
this
 position, especially, because I have not any plans for the holidays.
Additionally
, my strong interest in the city museum. I look forward to hearing from you soon, and I hope
this
 information will be helpful for you, please contact me for any other information. Yours Faithfully Raheel
Submitted by x.ra5eelah on

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coherence cohesion
To improve clarity, consider breaking your content into more distinct paragraphs, each dedicated to a specific point.
task achievement
For a more compelling application, include specific examples of your experience and how it relates to the job.
task achievement
While you've addressed all three bullets, adding more detail to each one can strengthen your application. Sharing specific instances where your skills made a difference can be particularly persuasive.
task achievement
Ensure consistent tone throughout your letter, aiming for a balance between professional and approachable.
task achievement
You've effectively introduced yourself and outlined your availability and interest in the position.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion is polite and anticipates a response, which is a good practice for letter writing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Director,
  • enthusiastic applicant
  • pursuing a degree in
  • customer service experience
  • volunteer work
  • multilingual
  • cash handling
  • POS systems
  • team player
  • punctual
  • excellent communicator
  • cultural enthusiast
  • part-time position
  • professional references available
  • at your earliest convenience
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