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More people are traveling today than ever before. Why do you think this is?

#people
Travelling is
a
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 easy thing in
present
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 than compared to the previous time with the improvement of infrastructure all over the world. Earlier
travel
 was not a popular thing and
people
 couldn't be able to
travel
 so far with the limited resources
thay
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they
that
 have. But the changes and improvement of roads, vehicles made
people
to
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travel
 within seconds. Earlier most of the
people
travel
 through ships if they wanted to
travel
 one
country
 to another
country
 as airlines are not that much popular and
people
 were not
afforable
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affordable
 to do that. But
today
genaration
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generation
 is much more
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 than earlier. They love to
travel
 even
for
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 the town to
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the country
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countryside
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country side
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. That's why
today
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hospitality
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 industry is very popular in every
country
 even with locals and foreigners.
Main
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 reason for
travel
today
 as I identified is to
relaxation
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 for most
of
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the
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people
 with their busy
shedules
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schedules
 and routine work. Many
people
 tend to
living
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 urban areas these days so they do not have enough space to living and even for
children
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 they do not have space to play with their friends
intract
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interact
 with
environment
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the environment
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 like past era. So,
today
 most
of
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the
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parents are tended to
travel
 with their children to
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country side
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countryside
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 and reduce stress. Not only the local
travels
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foregin
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foreign
 travels
also
 very popular
today
 even with developing
country
 like Sri Lanka with the enhancement of airline facilities. Having budget airlines and hotels made most of the middle-income peoples travelling dream come true as it was only designated for the higher-income
people
 in past.
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