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Today a lot of different cultures and ethnic groups live together in the country. Do you think it is a positive or negative development ?

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The trend of living together in the nation despite their cultural backgrounds, these days, is getting popular. It will have fruitful consequences because the development of the country, promotes different
cultures
 and traditions and less discrimination among citizens. The aforementioned development leads to boost the economy of the country. As people of different professional skills and characteristics of different
cultures
 will migrant to different countries.
This
 way, they will provide valuable suggestions and new methodologies according to their skill-set and traditions to improve the techniques and standards of the nation for the betterment of society and make society more productive and competent.
Consequently
, the country will be able to provide better-advanced technology and facilities to the residents.
For instance
, Indian IT professionals, who are living in America, have well-trained developing website skills, now helping them to build an advanced online education system.
Besides
 better financial conditions, it will help to spread awareness about different
cultures
.
This
 is because if pupils will get an opportunity to interact or staying with students and colleagues of various culture at school and companies
accordingly
, naturally, it will help them to learn about foreign culture
such
 as food, language, and fashion, thereby, people will become more open-minded and less racist and would be easy for them to adjust in a new society. To exemplify, Punjabi culture is famous in many countries because many people are settled in different countries. To recapitulate, owing to its merits, which are improved financial status of the nation and evolution of many
cultures
, it will have constructive outcomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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