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you work in a business company but poorly organised

#work #business #company
Dear
Mr.
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 Smith, I am writing to outline my candidature for
new
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the new
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 sales coordinator once there is a vacancy for a new leader in my department. Well, I would appreciate
to be
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 considered
to
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this
 position. I am confident that I suit perfectly to
this
 job, because not only have I been working in
this
 company for more than 10 years, but
also
, I have acquired the knowledge and skills
this
 position might require.
Firstly
, I have accumulated 5 years of being
account
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 manager here,
therefore
 I completely understand what a sales position requires and how our customers deal with business.
Besides
, I have leaded
engineering
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 team for 5 years which gave me managerial abilities. Unfortunately, the department needs a competent person who has
strategic
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 view to orient better the accountants and engineering designers.
Additionally
, I am aware that we need to improve our organic growth and have a better
operate
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 income. I would be glad to contribute
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 changing what is necessary to achieve what our stakeholders are expecting. I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours sincerely, Manuela Tiradentes.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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