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Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What causes water pollution? How can we prevent this problem?

#water #pollution #decades
Water
 is our most paramount asset as humans,
however
,
the
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humankind seems to not give it proper care. The rising number of catastrophes harming our reservatories is outstanding. Chemical plants and fuel
companies
 are among the culprits of
this
 issue and only the government and international authorities can resolve or at least get it under control.
Firstly
, there are several issues which may lead to
water
 pollution, one of them is certainly oil leaks from ships.
For example
, the many accidents from renowned fuel
companies
 that happened during the transport from one country to another by sea, where a full cargo ship leaked several
liters
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 of oil contaminating the sea fauna and flora of that place. The possible solution for
this
 issue remains
on
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 the hands of higher authorities that should imply hard fines and ensure that will not happen again.
Secondly
, another cause comes from the industry as well, when they
not
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 manage properly their sewage waste.
For instance
, chemical plants that not have filters and treatment for their waste and keep dumping them in the sewage system making it impossible, or at least, too expensive to have clean
water
 again.
Therefore
, again the society relies on government actions to tackle
this
 problem, not only with often specialized
fiscalizations
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visualizations
 but make these
companies
 pay for
water
 treatment stations. In conclusion, all significant problems linked with polluted
water
 comes from our industries.
Nevertheless
, the solutions are not that difficult, the government must do their work and keep a close eye
to
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this
 matter.
Furthermore
, when accidents
takes
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 place,
companies
 must do something in
prol
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proud
 of our environment.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Toxic substances
  • Eutrophication
  • Algae blooms
  • Pathogens
  • Nutrients
  • Organic matter
  • Marine environments
  • Coastal ecosystems
  • Microplastics
  • Food chain
  • Hazardous chemicals
  • Mining activities
  • Industrial waste
  • Agricultural runoff
  • Sewage and wastewater
  • Oil spills
  • Plastic pollution
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