Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smartphones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, teenagers are given freedom by their caretakers to
use
digital
technology
to improve their
knowledge
. For many people
use
of cell phones and tablets is a routine activity without which they feel incomplete.
However
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there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
this
. Herein, I will discuss the reason why allowing
school goers
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school-goers
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with
smart
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device like laptop and mobile phone
is
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beneficial and the challenge to overcome. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of giving smart
gadgets
to learners. One of the main positives of providing
such
gadgets
is making them equipped with technological advancements. What I mean by
this
is that they can gain
knowledge
from various online resources and keep themselves updated with
latest
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available
knowledge
.
For
instance
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a kid may have
curiosity
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the curiosity
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of
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knowing about space and astronomical events
such
as “an eruption of a black hole” but by simply surfing
internet
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the internet
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he can find out
tones
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of resources and images of his interest to quench his thirst
of
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knowledge
. Turning to the other side of the argument,
these
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technology
is like a sharp
dual edge
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sward
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, if used immaturely it can spoil juveniles. There are many kids who buy
such
smart tools by requesting to their guardians that they are required for studies but, when they are actually checked are used for playing online games and accessing social networking sites. I do not, say that
children
should not
use
for online activities, but, excessive
use
for online gaming and social networking will ruin their interest
for
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studies and their grades will be sharply get affected.
For instance
, these days there are many
children
who waste their lots of time
in
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watching short videos. All things considered,
children
need to be guided by their caretakers regarding
responsible
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use
of smart
equipment’s
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like laptop and cell phones. If they are made aware
about
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the hazards of misusing the
technology
then
they will surely
use
it carefully without wasting their time
for
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unnecessary events. On the other
had
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If they are not guided properly they may end up wasting their precious time
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social networking sites or age explicit content. Personally, I believe that the benefits in terms of providing access to smart
gadgets
to
children
eventually overweight’s the negative hazards if
children
are made aware of smart usage of
technology
rather than becoming slave of the
gadgets
.
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