Some old people today struggle with the use of modern technologies such as smart phones and computers. What is the cause of this and what are some possible solutions?

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people have difficulty with recent gadgets, and suggests some ways to resolve it. Technology has developed so fast day by day, and many users are having some problems learning how to lead with different types of devices, mainly the
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. The root of the problem is that most of them did not use or had access to technology in their youth, only
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individuals could afford
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learn how to handle a tablet before they learning how to read. The
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effect is that they usually don't have a person who has enough
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to teach them some basic features.
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, there is a wide space to develop the ability to use new technologies.
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is the main way to solve
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group tends to have a bigger learning process than new users. IT companies could develop an app or software where they could show and demonstrate how to
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few basic commands
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an easy tutorial. In
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could
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staffs able to help those above 50 years old by
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. In conclusion, one reason why the
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have
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in facing recent technologies is
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they did not have access to it in the past and
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they have not had the opportunity to adapt themselves to
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it is with a lot of effort and patient during their learning development.
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and increase their
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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