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Band 6

You recently registered for a course and you cannot attend the class for some reasons. Write a letter to your course instructor, and in your letter Introduce yourself. Explain the situation. and say what action you would like to take.

Dear Mr.Smith, The main reason why I am writing is to tell you that I cannot attend the
class
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 organized next week to improve my English skills.
Firstly
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, I must introduce myself. I am
the
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 student who
study
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is studying
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 at 6th school. My name is Diana Johnson.
Also
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, I live near my school. One of
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 reasons why I will not
able
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 to participate is that I have a cold. My body temperature is rising day by day and even, I cannot
standing
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 up on my legs.
Furthermore
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, I have had a headache for so days.
Although
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,
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 I
want
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 to go, my mother did not allow me because of my illness. If I was not sick, I would attend the
class
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 on time. I want to ask
another
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for another
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 opportunity
for missed
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to miss
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class
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the class
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 because I have
been
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wanted to improve my English
class
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 through that lesson. It was
the
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a
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 chance for development. Yours sincerely,  Diana Johnson.

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coherence cohesion
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more engaging.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, ensure that your explanations are connected and flow smoothly from one idea to the next.
task achievement
Proofread your letter for minor inaccuracies and correct them to improve clarity.
task achievement
You've effectively introduced yourself and explained the situation, which aligns well with the task's requirements.
task achievement
Your polite tone and structure, including an appropriate greeting and closing, are excellent.
coherence cohesion
The organization of your letter into clear paragraphs for each point is commendable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolled
  • academic or professional development
  • circumstances
  • prior commitments
  • regret
  • recordings
  • online resources
  • make-up classes
  • independently
  • proceed
  • correspondence
  • reiterate
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