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companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

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Enterprises that are socially committed to improving the development of the cities and their surroundings are becoming more and more common these days.
This
 essay will explain the importance of implementing practices that benefit our society and I will provide reasons to support why I strongly agree with
this
 community-oriented behaviour.
To begin
 with, companies owe their success and growth to the community that supports them, and as a return, they must adopt policies that pay something in return to contribute to the development of the neighbourhoods where they are located and their surroundings.
For example
, employees, customers, suppliers, environment, premises and so on, are essential parts of the company, without these elements, organizations could not exist and function.
Therefore
 a way to retribute their support is by providing facilities that help to improve the life quality of individuals living in the area
such
 as parks, recreation and sports centres, tutoring and training programs, daycare centres, nurseries among other services.
Additionally
, there is a positive economic impact when enterprises operate in a socially responsible manner. By offering benefits that promote the growth of the individuals, they are able to improve their economical situation which
consequently
 will increment the companies' profits because people have more purchasing power.
For instance
, if a teenager is taught a skill that allows him to develop professionally, he will become a man with a good income which means he will be able to spend more as a customer when he reaches his adult age. In conclusion, Organizations should be greatly compromised to give back to their citizens because they are able to subsist due to the support they receive from people, so implementing policies that lead to the development of the society in which they operate is supremely important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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