Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is often argued whether studying painting, drawing and music is useless or important for school children and if it should be encouraged or not. The paragraphs below will outline both sides of
this
trend and,
further
, I will give my own point of view.
To begin
with, some individuals claim that studying art subjects in school is positive
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because it can boost creativity and help
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in problem-solving issues. It is well known that painting and
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pictures usually have more than one interpretation, which forces people to look from
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point of views and, yet,
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disturbance to not ensure them of the right meaning.
Therefore
, as in puzzles, it is needed to find different visions of the same problem, to reach to
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path.
On the other hand
, some parents depart from
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idea, as they consider having theoretical knowledge rather than subjective ones a better investment in the long term to engage
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a course and,
consequently
, find a job.
For instance
, in Brazil, Universities tests are based on regular subjects knowledge,
such
as mathematics and history.
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in a course, being a hard skilled person is necessary.
Although
, in my opinion, I strongly deem art a positive subject to be maintained in
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curriculum. Nowadays companies expect proactivity from employees,
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kids' soft skills can help them to deal with problematic situations, which is fundamental to build a career. To conclude, both arguments have their merits.
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, I consider studying artistic movements essential for children development as it can be a positive
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to be a proactive person and a problem-solver.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • cultural awareness
  • tolerant society
  • STEM subjects
  • employability
  • rigorous subjects
  • curriculum
  • school budgets
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