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Many people believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in a countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree??

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These days, living in an urban area is becoming more popular compare to the past.It has been a widespread debate that
city
 life offers immense advantages over rural lifestyle.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and support the latter view.
First
 and foremost, countryside living has provided an abundance of benefits. For
one
 thing, far from
city
 reside provides good health, as it has less air and noise pollution, fresh food and peaceful environment.
In addition
,
compare
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compared
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 to
city
 dwellers, in
countryside
Correct article usage
the countryside
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one
 can get more time to spend with their family as well as to pursue their hobbies.
For instance
, a survey conducted by WHO in 2016 revealed that 80% of people admitted that, family life has compromised in cities.
On the other hand
, a plethora of opportunities available in urban areas.
Firstly
, it gives enormous career opportunities as well as high employment rates, and good job opportunities are
one
 of the major cause to attract youngsters.
Secondly
, the
city
 side offers the quality of life in terms of modern hospitals, schools, universities and many more.
For example
, a wide range of options is available for parents to opt for schools, while in a rural area, only
one
 or two options are available for education.
Furthermore
, entertainment in leisure time always plays an imperative role in individual. It provides a number of activities for every age groups
such
 as theatres, social and sports clubs, various activity groups and gardens. In recapitulation, both
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 has their own merits and demerits.
However
, cities proffer various activities and benefits which make cityside reside more advantageous than the countryside.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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