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Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion.

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When buying a product, most
people
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 weigh up price versus
quality
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. While some feel that durability should be the main priority, others argue that affordability is more important. In
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 essay, I will examine both views and explain why I feel that
companies
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 and customers need to make responsible decisions. Those who prioritise
quality
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 argue that if
products
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 lasted longer, waste could be reduced. Indeed, it is obvious that as
products
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 have become almost disposable, the amount of landfill is growing. Most
people
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,
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, buy a new phone every two to three years regardless of need.
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 throw-away mentality drives more production which
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 contributes to environmental damage through raw material extraction, factory emissions, transportation and packaging. If we only bought one mobile phone per decade
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, we could dramatically reduce
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 impact. For others, lower prices are more important than
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quality
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. Indeed, compared to fifty years ago, the range of
products
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 on the market is bigger and the prices are much more affordable. A computer,
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, used to cost several thousand dollars, but now it is possible to buy one for under $300.
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 means that more
people
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 have access to
such
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 items, which means greater equality and opportunity, particularly when it comes to
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such
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 as cars and electronics. Personally, I feel the best way forward is for both businesses and consumers to think carefully about their choices. For
companies
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, consideration must be given to sustainable and ethical practices. Rather than producing a range of poorly made cheap clothing that will not
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 more than a season, it would be better to invest a little more in
quality
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 materials and workmanship. That said, it is
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 up to the consumer to reward those
companies
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 that step up. They too should seek out
companies
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 that demonstrate best practice rather than simply opt for the lowest price. In conclusion, the battle between
quality
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 and affordability is always going to exist. In order to strike a balance that minimises environmental impact and allows all
people
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 access to
products
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, corporations and individuals need to use their judgement.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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