You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Dear

sir

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Sir

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or Madam, I hope

this

Linking Words

letter finds you in

right

Correct article usage

the right

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health .I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter . I make a new buy

earphones

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I need

earphones

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who

your

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you

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have markets .I see which social

madie

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media

Telegram,

Youbube

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YouTube

, Instagram and others you

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are a

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new local market.

Has

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Have

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you which

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need

earphones

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. If to be

earphones

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you can price

for

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them for

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me . I would be grateful

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apply

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the price

cheap

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was cheap

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. Can you tell me how long

Linking Words

this products

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this product

these products

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I look forward to

reason

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reasoning

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a positive

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reaply

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response

from you as soon as possible

Your

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Yours

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faithfully ABDUVALIYEV ASILBEK

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Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure to use a clear greeting and closing. Instead of 'Dear sir or Madam', it would be better to write 'Dear Sir or Madam'.

Coherence and Cohesion

Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. For instance, one paragraph could ask about earphones, another could inquire about prices, and a third could ask about how long the goods can be held.

Task Achievement

Consider adjusting your tone to sound more formal or polite. For example, instead of 'I would be grateful it to the price cheap', you could say 'I would appreciate it if you could provide me with the prices.'

Task Achievement

Clarify your requests. When asking about earphones, provide specific details about what you are looking for.

Task Achievement

Your intent to inquire about products and prices is clear.

Task Achievement

You have made an effort to ask about how long the shop can hold the goods for you, which shows consideration.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

98 words

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