Qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies. Some people believe that rich countries are stealing from poor countries. How far dp you agree woth the statement.

Many public from
poor
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the poor
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community with higher education prefer to migrate to developed rich countries due to many facts .
Firstly
,rich state lure
population
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the population
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from poor
society
by offering handsome salaries. So that, one could dream to develop their status of living financially.
Secondly
,
population
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the population
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of higher education feels to migrate from their native
society
to develop their skills of knowledge and broaden their
education
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horizons. As poor
region
are unable to provide all developed facilities which could hamper their voracity of development. It doesn’t imply that rich
society
are
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stealing from
poor
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the poor
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region
. Because they are encouraging
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the
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community’s ability by offering many facilities to develop them to rose in their standards. It
also
doesn’t make any sense to ask rich land to pay for calling
society
from
poor
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the poor
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region
.
Instead
, the govt of
poor
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region
should encourage their ingenious community to stay and give their sophisticated services to
native
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the native
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country by focusing more on
developing
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the developing
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country financially and as well as technologically. The rich community could
also
help poor
society
to develop by organizing their own companies in the country or investing in
business
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a business
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with them.
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