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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#technologies #lives #consumers
Shopping
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 world is having innovations thanks to new
technologies
, which are changing the
way
 how people buy and sell. I totally agree with
this
 statement, because I think new
technologies
 have a significant influence when it comes to shopping.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will provide information about new facilities of shopping that we have now, and
secondly
, I will give arguments about how salespeople find it easier now to make their business thanks to it. Online shopping has made us
to
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enter a new era for consumers because of fancy
technologies
. Nowadays with just a click on
own
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our own
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computer
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 we can find everything we need
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in at
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a
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at
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short
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a short
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 period of time, and we get it in our houses in many cases in only 24h shipping.
For example
,
a
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recent
new
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news
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 by BCC showed that approximately 80% of the population in the UK buy online things rather
going
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than going
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 to physical stores,
such
 as groceries and clothes. New
technologies
has
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also
 given a new stage for salespeople lives.It provided a good
way
 for business people to make their projects from another country, so they can publish
online
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 advertisement, and everyone in the world is able to see and buy them if they want. By the
way
 of illustration, I am a new artist who started selling my drawings to people that I know, but I could not sell
as
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enough artworks
as
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to continue with my little business. But weeks later my friend published them on
internet
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, and I was able to go back and grow up thanks to it. Overall,
lives
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the lives
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 of consumers are changing a lot because of new
technologies
, but it has an important positive impact
for
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on
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 our society because it makes easier the
way
 of buying and selling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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