Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal . Some people , however , think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

There are different views about whether the most essential target in
countries
should be economic progress according to the
government
's belief or similar value between economic and other goals in the public view. While
governments
argh that economic progress is a vital aim for a country , I think that other goals would be important as well as economic improvement. In the following essay , both of the views will be discussed. On one hand , being some
none-financial
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problems in
countries
would be the reason for people who believe that economic and other goals are equally. Apparently , when there are some issues in
countries
which improving financial conditions can not be enough to solve them , other aims can be valuable as same as
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one.
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kind of matters
need
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none-economic protections from
governments
.
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,preventing
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violence against
of
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women needs establishing some useful principle behind the economic help from
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to support female in
this
field.
Therefore
, some problems in a country may not be solved unless
government
be supportive and seem equal view about economic and other
progresses
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.
On the other hand
, in the
government
opinion, many of problems in societies have a root in financial matters and people's life is influenced by
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situation . When
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poverty or economic issues which
is
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influential to decline tranquillity is observed in
countries
, improvement in
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the economic
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situation can be the main goal for
governments
.
This
kind of target may create more satisfaction and development in
countries
.
For instance
, if people do not have a proper financial situation , many
of
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needs
such
as children's education , feeding and providing live accommodation will not be progressed that can
be
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cause
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the cause
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of an unsuccessful life. It can be
therefore
argued that
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more
governments
seem
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economic development as their main gold. The more improvement and tranquillity in the societies might
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. In
cinclusion
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conclusion
, I can understand why
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consider
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economic development as the best target , but I think if other aims are seen valuable as same as Romanian progress , it would be more beneficial for
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • socio-economic development
  • quality of life
  • stakeholder
  • sustainable development
  • public sector
  • non-governmental organization (NGO)
  • civic engagement
  • green technology
  • quality of education
  • universal healthcare
  • cultural integrity
  • global competitiveness
  • human capital
  • innovation ecosystem
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