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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#children #language #school #support
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Nowadays, learning varied
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 become imperative for
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 because of many reasons. I completely agree with
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 notion and
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 behind my inclination are articulated in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are myriad benefits of getting knowledge about various
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 at
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, if
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 add different
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 courses in their annual curriculum
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this
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 approach of schools will give
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the opportunity
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 to pupils learn new words and their applications not only
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 they will learn about other cultures.
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 thing may help them in long run.
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 to migrate in any foreign country
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another language
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 will aid him to communicate with
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a student
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 of the university. Apart from
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 , they learning various
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 male
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 bilingual.
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, there are some others merits of having
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 of distinct
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 .
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, if a child
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businessman
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a businessman
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 in future and he
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 to run his businesses across other countries
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 knowing other
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 will help them to communicate with local business persons
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 can make mutual understanding.
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, in future , if
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 want to be a teacher of
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 courses .
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, some intellectual individuals of society believe that
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 should only focus on scientific subjects as those subjects provide
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 future and those subjects are logical ones so
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 become more intelligent. In conclusion, I’m totally in support of adding
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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