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In the future, more people will choose to go holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 contemporary era, most
people
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travel
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to
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abroad in
future
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instead
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 of going on holiday in their own nation.
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is disagrees
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 with the statement.
People
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 are aware
about
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of
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 travelling and they want to explore other countries on their vacations. I will explain
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in
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below
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the below
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 paragraphs with examples. To commence with most masses think to
travelling
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 is the best leisure activity that we can do on vacation. Nowadays,
travel
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 to other countries with their families and friends are common.
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, we can explore other cultures
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, learn their tradition.
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, If we are going to Europe
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 we can visit their historical places and learn about
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Europe
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 history. Another best part is that
,
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people
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 would like to gain some international experience and meet with different
people
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 and try to learn their native language and understand them.
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, with the help of
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 trying to understand their culture and exchange our ideas.
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, before travelling
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overseas, we plan and try to understand their culture, currency and language. So, we can communicate smoothly. The most sustainable alternatives to fossil fuels are the generation of power from natural forces
such
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 as the sun, wind and oceans. Solar and wind power are already widely used across the world but it is wave power and tidal
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 that have the greatest untapped potential to provide for our
energy
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 needs in the
future
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.
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, A report recently commissioned in the United Kingdom estimates that tidal
energy
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 could meet as much as 20% of the UK’s current electricity demands once the technology being developed is operational. Wave
energy
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 converters are expected to prove equally successful in the
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. In conclusion,
travel
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to
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abroad will mandatory kind of thing for most
people
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 in the
future
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instead
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 of going into
own
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their own
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 country. In my opinion,
travel
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 to aboard will essential in the
future
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 and we learn new things about their culture and traditions.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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