In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better. Give reasons and relevant examples for your answer.

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Marriage

is an unforgettable event in everyone’s life.it is believed by some

individuals

that , all the arrangements regarding marriages should be done by guardians, while others perceive that

individuals

should have the right to select their companions.

This

essay will examine both the arguments and draws a logical conclusion in the end. To commence with, some people deem that marriages should be managed by

parents

,because they have lived half of their

life

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marriage

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the marriage

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relationship.

hence

, they have more knowledge about , how to find

correct

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partner for their children in terms of ;behaviour, characteristics and traits because

this

things

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matters the most while selecting

parents

Parents

also

believe that adults are too young to understand

this things

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that

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why

parents

ought to pick companion for youngsters.

For instance

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in India

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India

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marriage

are not happen

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between 2

individuals

they happen with 2 families and that’s why in India

parents

always show interference when it comes to

choose

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partners for their own children.

On the other hand

, some people think that

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individuals

should be the one who selects their own partners because mutual

understand

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between two persons should be prioritised the most.

Moreover

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there are some other factors too which

plays

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major

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role in selecting

soulmate

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Firstly

, educational qualifications should be the same between the two who ties the know so they do not feel superiority complex.

Secondly

, before getting married couples should stay with each

another

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live in

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relationship term which is in the trend recently.

However

, I personally believe that

marriage

is a

person

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decision and

individuals

should take responsibility to select their partners because of

aforementioned

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reasons. In conclusion,

parents

also

play

indispensable

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role in children’s life but after

certain

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age

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they should give their children chances

made

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their own verdicts.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
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24Grammar mistakes
 

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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