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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Air
flights
, whether it is international or domestic, nowadays, become an affordable luxury for middle-class people.
However
,
this
 facility comes with both advantages and disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the arguments and I support the latter view. On the one side, cheap
air
 tickets for passengers are beneficial in enormous
ways
.
Firstly
, time-saving is one of the main root advantages of
air
 journey. Because of
this
, local and small businesses now expanding more in both international and domestic market.
Besides
, in case of emergency, it is a boon for ordinary people that they can reach easily their loved ones, without any financial hurdles, which is not possible a few decades before. On the other side, we can not deny the fact that cheap aeroplanes mean poor quality as well as an increased number of
flights
, which in turn, increase the pollution in the
air
 ,which is not present before, at that height, the atmosphere is already clean and clear.
Furthermore
, traffic congestion in the sky is more dangerous than road transportation.
Thus
, it is not recommended by safety authorities as it is like playing with everyone's life. In fact, a survey conducted by the national authorities of the USA shows that in near future,
air
 travelling will become one of the riskiest
ways
 of transport.
Moreover
, talking about other
ways
 of transport,
such
 as government and private buses, boats , and private cars, are highly impacted by
air
 transportation. As a consequence, it will harmful for the economy of any nation as well as create an unemployment situation in a particular country. To recapitulation, I believe that the downsides of cheap
air
flights
 are more than the positives.
Thus
, cheap
flights
 should be banned partially for some circumstances to balance the other
ways
 of transport.
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