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Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many
people
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 enjoy spending their
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 doing their
hobbies
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.
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, few
people
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 make special
time
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 for
hobbies
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. There are many reasons why
people
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 do not spend their
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in
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hobbies
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. In
this
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 essay, I will propose some of the main reasons that I think they keep
people
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 away from their
hobbies
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. One probable
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culprits
 are schools and universities. Many students find it difficult to manage between their
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 and study
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requirements
. They spend half their day
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 school, and the other half studying at home and doing
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homework
. Students have to choose where to spend their
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 and
intuitvely
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intuitively
 they will opt for studying as a priority. They will delay
entertainments
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 for vacations. Another
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possible
 reason
,
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 is nowadays' jobs, they take the whole day from the poor
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. After they finish their work, they rush
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home searching for a comfortable bed.
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, some
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 married
people
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 have other responsibilities to look for
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 as taking care of children, housekeeping, and self-improvement.
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 but not least, is
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social
media
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. I think the vast majority of
people
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 now spend their
time
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 on social
media
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. When they have spare
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 to kill, they quickly log in
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socail
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social
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 apps and a huge
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 is lost without them feeling about it. To summarize, I believe that the reasons why few
people
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 enjoy their
time
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 to do
hobbies
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 are categorised into four main points; the demanding school requirements, the long working hours, family
responsibilites
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responsibilities
, and social
media
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 apps where most
people
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 lose their
time
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instead
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 of doing their
hobbies
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.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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