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Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For years, reading
books
 has been a
dominated
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 way of entertainment for
children
.
However
, with the popularity of various electronic devices,
children
 can
also
 spend their leisure time watching
TV
 and playing
computer
games
. I partly agree with the view held by some people that reading stories in
books
 is a better use of time than watching
TV
 or playing
computer
games
. Admittedly,
TV
 and
computer
games
 appear to be more stimulating and engaging since they combine auditory and visual information together. The well-designed visual animation, recorded music, together with flexible interactions of electronic activities could easily attract
children
’s attention and stimulate their study interest.
For example
, some educational channels on
TV
 not only provide entertainment but
also
 impart knowledge and information.
Nevertheless
, the benefits of reading in
books
 could outweigh those of watching
TV
 or playing electronic
games
 to some extent.
Firstly
,
books
 expand
imagination
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. To be more specific,
books
 allows
children
 themselves to make up the character’s voices and paint the pictures in their own way rather than sitting in front of a screen and simply enjoying the directors’ painting.
Therefore
, during the reading process, enough imagination space
are
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 there for
children
 to develop their creative thinking and even critical thinking.
In addition
,
books
, though not always even in quality, are far more psychologically beneficial than
TV
 or video
games
. Compared to
TV
 or video
games
, to which
children
 could easily become addicted,
book
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the book
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 can really be paused since readers could pick right back up where they left off.
Moreover
,
books
 are ends in themselves. Compared with
TV
 and
computer
games
 that are created mainly for
the
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entertainment purpose,
books
 are written not for the purpose of achieving something else but only to communicate great ideas of life, of death, of struggle. Given
this
 kind of nature,
books
 are a better way for
children
 to get positive values and knowledge.
Thus
, without addiction and negative information,
books
 could provide
children
 healthy
grow
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 up. In conclusion, even though
children
 are fond of electronic activities more than
books
, I am convinced that
TV
 and video
games
 pale in comparison with
books
 and
children
 should
spent
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 more time
on
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reading.
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