Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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to have a specific
career
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Education
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life;
one
should have many careers to make money, as per
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trend
. It is believed by many nowadays that, it has become difficult to survive in
this
modern world with
one
single
career
. Where technology is evolving every day, it has become
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for people to become
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in their fields to compete with these technological changes.
Additionally
,
also
it is true that multi
career
individuals are being paid higher remunerations than those who
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single
career
education
. It is being adopted by many companies, to hire a single person who knows multi-tasking and can handle different tasks at the same time.
This
saves huge money
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companies.
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approach to
this
trend
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some people consider
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detrimental to human’s health and condemns its spread. They believe that, if people are having several careers, there may be extra pressure on their mind and that will directly affect their health. If a person is handling cash in a bank, with huge transactions and company added cheques handling responsibility
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his job duties as well,
this
will be additional pressure.
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burden on parents, as having qualifications in different careers could cost a lot. It would be impossible for
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parents to bear their children's
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if they are having more than
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child.
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individuals to have more than
one
career
and have diversified
education
, it should not be made mandatory for all, as it is not possible for everyone.
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