Many governments spend a lot of money on art. Some people think this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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contemporary
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era, it generally accepted that
art
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the
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society and plays a valuable role in culture and
history
.
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to promote the artistic
orgnaizations
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organizations
,
art
galaries
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galleries
, and other
art related
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matters government
investe
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invest
invested
big amount of
money
on it, others believe that hard cash should be invested on public service and
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cause. In my
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spending
money
on
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accelerating
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medical and educational needs is more important than
art
. There are two main reasons why people think
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money
on artwork is
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essential
.
First
and
formost
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foremost
for most
, it
represent
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culture
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the culture
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and
history
of the society. As artist keep
alive
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an alive
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history
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the history
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of the
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society
in their
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artwork
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art work
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artwork
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, it’s essential to spend
money
on it so that they not only keep motivated but
also
encurage
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encourage
new artist.
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to
this
, in
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world everything would be possible with technology including
art
, so to keep gathering attention
oon
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on
real
art
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important to spend some handsome
amoount
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amount
on it.
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, Madhubani is
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kind of
the
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art
of Bihar, it represents
culture
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the culture
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and
history
of Bihar. And to keep it alive for
long
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time or to promote the
art
and artist itss required
goveronment
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government
support
. There are
however
, some people including me,
think
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that
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taxpayers’
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hard cash should
be invest
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on
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public services. As most
art
galleries are getting
huge
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amount of
money
from their ticket price
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itself
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it self
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, it’s important to invest in
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accelerate
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medical
support
by
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the proliferation
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of staff and technologies.
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, there are more
then
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5000 tourist visit Delhi
art
musium
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museum
daily by paying $20 ticket price, so the
musium
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museum
it self
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itself
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earn $10000 daily and it looks like
its
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more
then
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suffcient
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sufficient
to run a
musium
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museum
. Clearly,
government
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the government
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needs to financially
support
to
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other public areas which actually required financial
support
in order to improve. In conclusion, as
art
galleries have other options to generate
money
its good to invest it in the area which are accessible by
large
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a large
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number of people and which actually required financial
support
.
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