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In many countries, there is a growing gap between the technical skills of younger people and those over the age of fifty. What problems does this cause, and what solutions could minimize the problems?

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In many countries, has been calculated a growth between the technological skills of younger
people
 and those over the age of fifty.
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 is
may be
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 due
of
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 the period in which the
two
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two-generation
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generation
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 were born: the young
people
 were born in a time where the
technology
 was already in development,
instead
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,instead
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 the “old”
people
 were born when the
technology
 was just born. From the general
problem
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 we can understand that the effect that
this
 issue may bring is a future world based on
technology
.
First
 of all, one problem is that nowadays only young
people
 can understand
technology
 because they are growing up with
this
.
This
 is an issue
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cause
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 when
an
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old
people
 have difficulties with
technological
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the technological
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 instrument, they need to call someone younger to help them. A solution for
this
 can be
to
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too
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 organized some courses with the aim to teach
also
 old human being how to
use
technology
 and to make it understandable to all generation.
On the other hand
, the
use
 of
technology
 is not good for the planet
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 which we are leaving
in
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because there is an enormous
consume
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 of energy. A solution for
this
, since we cannot eliminate
technology
 entirely, we can
use
 it as little as possible or
use
 it for half our work. In
this
 way we can guarantee a better world for the future generations
otherwise
, if we continue to
use
technology
 for all kind of our activities, we will destroy our world. To conclude and to sum up all the solution for the initial problem, we can say that could be organized some courses to make
technology
 more understandable to all human beings and we as
people
 can minimize the
use
 of
technology
 to make our planet happier.
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