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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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What to write in a newspaper and what to cast on television is the choice of columnists. I believe that their reports are predominantly influenced by politicians and far behind
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reality. Admittedly, it is true that
news
channels
 and newspapers are massive sources to circulate crucial information in
wide
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 range of fields like education, business, trade, weather and
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.
However
, I believe recently these sources are highly influenced by politicians and even some of them have been found, having shares in some
news
channels
.
News
 reporters or
channels
 are being bribed to telecast
news
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 or against the ruling parties by the opposition parties. If these reports are not scrutinized in detail by some governing body,
this
 trend will be having detrimental results for our future generation. It is true that
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 most of the information conveyed through these media
channels
 is negative and disturbing; it is very rare to hear something related to goodness and
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. I am
also
 not in the opinion that all
news
 reports are false, on one
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 many of them are realistic and point outs problems in the society for
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development and improvements. But
on the other hand
, many of the reporters using
this
 channel in a negative way and for their
self interest
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, they publish wrong information. It would be obviously better if we hear more good
news
;
this
 will develop overall positivity in
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society. In my point of view, there should be a governing body established to overview all these
news
 editors and their articles, who can take action against them if something bogus is published.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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