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The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that the development of multinational
companies
 and
globalization
 bring positive impacts to everyone. I feel it would be advantageous to most
people
, but not everyone. Admittedly, it brings several benefits to most
people
. To expand the market, multinational
companies
 would usually build lots of branches and factories in the local and other countries, creating more job opportunities for
people
. As a consequence, a large number of
people
 can get a stable job with a respectively decent salary, making them have more disposable money.
In addition
, there are lots of high-quality products with low prices.
Globalization
 makes the product competition become more and more fierce, which compel
companies
 to improve the quality of product and lower the commodities' prices to survive in the market. In
such
 cases, more and more products are accessible for most
people
, improving their living quality.
Nevertheless
, not all
people
 enjoy positive consequence brought by multinational
companies
 and
globalization
.
For example
,
people
 living in impoverished areas are confronted with environmental issues caused by the production of multinational
companies
. These
companies
 intend to build factories in impoverished countries because of the low cost of
the
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labour and raw materials, accelerating the depletion of the local natural resources
such
 as forest and water and discharge contaminants into river, land, and air.
Therefore
, the deteriorating environmental quality will pose a threat to the health of
people
. In conclusion,
although
 multinational
companies
 and
globalization
 create benefits for most
people
,
people
 in some cases are facing their detrimental impacts, which we cannot ignore.
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