Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal . Some people , however , think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

There are different views about whether the main goal in
countries
should be considered the economic
progress
( according to the
government
view ) or other targets can be as same as economic
progress
(in people mind) . In my view ,
although
having development in the economy would be beneficial , the other
progress
can have equal value with
economic
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jump. In the following essay , both of the views will be discussed. On one hand , being some
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problems
in societies would be the reason for seem similarity value between the economic and other goals .
Moreover
, If some issues are observed in
countries
which improvement in
economic
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situation can not solve the
problems
lonely , it will need to look for other solutions.
Also
,
this
kind of solution would be
as
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a goal for the
government
that can be vital as well as the economic
progress
.
For instance
, preventing
to
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deforestation need
the
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environmental protections from
governments
such
as establishing some laws to decline environmental damage in the woodlands.
Therefore
, there are some matters in societies that need
to
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virtual protection from
governments
as an aim behind the financial
progress
.
On the other hand
, the reason for
governments
belief about seeing economic advances as the main goal in societies would be the fact that many matters in a country have a root in the financial
problems
.
Furthermore
, many issues are influenced by the economic situation in
countries
which can not be improved unless the
government
sees
the
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economic development as their necessary aim .
For example
,
however
,
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divorce
is an emotional issue , the cause of it would be the financial
problems
in the couple's life
such
as inability to passing the life.
Finally
, the more
government
pay attention to economic
progress
as the most essential goal , the more other
progress
and improvements will appear in the
countries
. To sum up , I can understand the cause of
governments
view about economic advances as
the
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strong gold, I argue that other targets might be valuable as well as
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developed because many matters are solved by solutions which
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not economic .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • socio-economic development
  • quality of life
  • stakeholder
  • sustainable development
  • public sector
  • non-governmental organization (NGO)
  • civic engagement
  • green technology
  • quality of education
  • universal healthcare
  • cultural integrity
  • global competitiveness
  • human capital
  • innovation ecosystem
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