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In recent years,” responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environmrnt of the places thay visit. However, some poelpe say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#years #tourists” #attention #culture #environmrnt #places #thay #visit #poelpe #“responsible #tourist”
Nowadays, more and more
people
 travel around
other place
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, it became
a
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trendy.
Thus
, some
people
 encourage visitors to be
a
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apply
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"responsible
tourists
" who protect local culture and
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environment
enviroment
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.
However
, it
exist
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 some
people
 consider it's difficult to reach the standard of a "responsible tourist".
Therefore
, in the following essay, l will demonstrate my opinion.
Firstly
, the local scenic area
have
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 no measurement or facility to limit
people
 doing some immoral
behaviors
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behaviours
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.
For example
, if a person
carry
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many
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litter
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litters
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 and he or she
want
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 to abandon them
in to
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 a trash can, but there have no trash can so that some
people
 have to abandon rubbish anywhere.
Secondly
, it depends on behaviour habitat of
tourists
, some
tourists
 have low quality, they will take away some
sovenior
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souvenir
souvenirs
 like stones, soils etc. Meanwhile, we
also
 carve
wrrting
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writing
 or design on trees or walls.
Although
 these are insignificant things, if millions of
people
 all do
taht
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that
, it
lead
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 to enormous destruction.
Moreover
，in
oerder
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order
 to earn more money,
local
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 scenic area management department
have
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 no limitation attract
people
visit
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to visit
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 here, it
maybe
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may be
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change
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local
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the local
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 environment and culture when more and more
people
 visit these places, it will only be a matter of time when these places are contaminated and eventually ruined. In conclusion, if preserving local culture and ecosystem, the government has to improve management for scenic area, and for individual, we should control ourselves and reduce
such
 impolite action, it will get better and better and we will closer to be a "responsible
tourists
".
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