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Many people believe that the priority of the government should be to ensure a growing economy. While others believe that the government should focus its efforts on uplifting the less fortunate? Discuss both views.

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The majority of the
people
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 in the
country
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 think that developing an
economy
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 of a
country
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 should be considered
first
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 by the administration. Meanwhile, the rest of others thinks that poor
people
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 in a
country
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 should be at the top of the priority list. In
this
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 essay, I would discuss the territory
economy
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 level and the unwealthy
people
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.
Firstly
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, by improving the growth rate of an
economy
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 we can elevate the living standards of the
people
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 by bringing more goods and services to the
country
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.
Secondly
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, the unemployment rate of society is decreased.
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, we can offer more jobs to underprivileged
people
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 by developing a new industry. And to that, we may
also
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 reduce the overall expense of the
people
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 who are living in the society.
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, we should
also
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 give equal importance to the less fortunate
people
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. Because poverty is the disgraceful and unjust condition that has always haunted humankind. It divides the
people
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 into classes like high class and low class. And it
also
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 leads to diversity among the
people
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. so the authority must take effective measures for the
people
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.
for instance
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, an equal educational system for all, scholarships for below poverty line
people
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, or to the
first
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 graduate
people
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 in a family. In conclusion, Economic growth leads to better living standards for the
people
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. While considering the poor
people
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 we can improve the overall development of the
economy
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 of the
country
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. So, the administration should give parallel importance to the
economy
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 and the less fortunate
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • job opportunities
  • standards of living
  • infrastructure
  • public services
  • advocates
  • positive cycle
  • social equity
  • justice
  • government policies
  • reduce poverty
  • essential services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • equitable distribution
  • balanced approach
  • implementing policies
  • equitably shared
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