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In many cities there is little control on the design and the construction of new homes and office building, people can build houses in their own style . What are the advantages and disadvantges of this situation ?

#cities #control #design #construction #homes #office #people #houses #style #disadvantges #situation
Nowadays, the estate
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company
companys
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become
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an
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 large investor in the economy. Always likely, the people are looking for property in new buildings, without showing the interest of the number of levels and the location is situated it, that make an
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increase
 of
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 of constructions.
As a result
, some houses are
bulding
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building
 even in a wide area of land, but let
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 if
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 solution for it? On one hand, the
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higher
 construction
meens
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means
 many
appartments
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apartments
.
Therefore
 more families can live in a piece of land, and do not need to
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 more surface.
For example
, in a
bulding
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building
 with 10 levels can live about 45 families. It is a good smart answer for
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 and for people and it is not so much
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 for both.
On the other hand
, there are houses established on the dangerous
teritory
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territory
. These can be used by a few numbers of persons. I believe, that
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 type of housing is
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convenient
 for citizen hoe wants to live in a
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certain
 place
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 and avoid busy regions. I think to put
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 risk your health just to be where you want is
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 decision for solving your problem. Rather, they can invest more to
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 your space in a
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 and calm district. Concluding the description related to the text, it is more relevant
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 before it is necessary to balance the good
conditons
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conditions
 and bad ones, the most important points you want to reach, and
than
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 to analyse all
this
toghether
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together
. In the end, I'd like to mention that
the
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 healthy lifestyle is
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 priority
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 all others things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Architectural diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Personal taste
  • Economic boost
  • Tourists
  • Architects
  • Investors
  • Enhanced functionality
  • Uniformity
  • Cityscape
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Safety standards
  • Potential hazards
  • Property value
  • Future buyers
  • Environmental impact
  • Waste management
  • Energy efficiency norms
  • Green building practices
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