Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and do not want to visit a doctor. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays,
medical
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side is open for everyone who
take
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knowledge. All popularity
have
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nearly 20
percent
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per cent
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command on medical education. So, some human beings get preference to take advice for
health
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a health
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issue. In my
thinking
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it is
positive
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a positive
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process because today living style is vast . but ,
sometime
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sometimes
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taking appointment of
doctor
is
much
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better option.
To begin
with, younger are not interested to visit a
doctor
because they have
busy
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schedule
any way
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, they prefer to get information via
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
, in
metro
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a metro
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city travelling time is nearly 2-3 hours. Due to
these reason
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these reasons
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, they choose online
consultation
and
then
take medicines.
Secondly
, some family they do not have
ability
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as well as they are afraid to
face
physician because they shy to discuss their issue
face
to
face
.
Although
, they go with
take
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advice from home and overcome from health problems.
for instance
, some women related health affection, ladies do not share their problems frequently in front of a
doctor
.
Moreover
, they prefer online treatment.
Thirdly
, digital conference
are
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available
in
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on
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different
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a different
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type of sites as well as many application are
their
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there
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.
Moreover
, medicines are
also
accessible online via
application
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the application
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.
In
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other hand
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, it is sometimes positive
furthermore
its
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it's
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negative. For
this
purpose,
people
should take online
consultation
.
on the other hand
, for other treatment like scanning,
X- ray
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X-ray
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, MRI etc. they have to meet
doctor
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the doctor
a doctor
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. If they don’t follow
these
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this
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therapy
then
they get injured for
lifetime
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a lifetime
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. To be specific, every physician
do
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not have
online
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an online
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service . equally, in
covid-19
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the covid-19
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pandemic
situation
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some
people
get online therapy as well as medicines but they have to visit
doctor
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a doctor
the doctor
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for collecting blood sample as well as sometimes for scanning
also
. But one problem is that
,
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at the situation of breathing problem they have
bed
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a bed
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with
oxygen
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an oxygen
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cylinder and because of increasing cases
people
can not find
bed
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a bed
the bed
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in their nearest hospital.
That is
the main
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drawback
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draw back
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drawback
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of online
consultation
other
doctor
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doctors
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don’t know about
people
history to do immediate therapy.
Lastly
, in my conclusion, “ every coin has two side” online
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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save time and they are needful for
emergency
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an emergency
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but,
face
to
face
consultation
is
also
beneficial for human. they go for both as per
situation
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the situation
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.
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