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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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It is sometimes argued that troublesome school
students
 should be separated from other
students
. In my opinion, it would definitely make the matters worse if the
students
 are isolated. There are several reasons why I would argue against isolating problematic school
students
 from other
students
.
Firstly
, dividing the misbehaved
students
 into a separate group will turn them into even more stubborn
students
 and
this
 will make it very difficult for teachers to control them.
Secondly
, there is no good role model and peer’s pressure to motivate them to change for the better, which
this
 issue can lead to the worse performance of their study.
Finally
, they can not be adapted to
the
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society in the future. Because they were treated differently from the normal
students
 that are the majority people in common.
On the other hand
, it is clear that
this
 kind of
students
 do not understand why they have to be a well-behaved student like others. I believe that the problem can be solved by giving the reasons to encourage them.
For example
, telling those
students
 to understand the point that easy habit like becoming more discipline can improve their study, which
this
 improvement can be affected to their future career. By doing so, the disruptive
students
 will not only understand why they have to be better but
also
 they can stay motivated because of that why.
Therefore
, I’m convinced that a clear reason to do something can improve naughty
students
 to become
a
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better adult in the future. In conclusion, I believe that things would get worse if the naughty
students
 are isolated from others.
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