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Many people believe that eighteen years old is the appropriate age to finish school. To  what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There are many people who think
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age
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 to finishing
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apply
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school
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eighteen
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years
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 old. I completely agree with
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 statement because of
maturity
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the maturity
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 of
student
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the student
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 and legal norms.
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most children become mature until
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years
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 old
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 when they had been learnt essential skills to handle different situations in the future. If a teenager
mature
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 enough physically and mentally, they will choose their educational and vocational interests correctly.
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, during
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high
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, they can take at least abilities to
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 in general opportunities or living apart from family. So these achievements
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 the certain span that end of high
school
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 is known as the appropriate
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 to
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 object.
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, there are legal requirements to achieve some activities, which usually students can not tackle before
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. Acceptance of university is an example to clarify
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 statement. People who want to continue their study should get
diploma
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 to admission the university, that they gain crucial practical and theoretical skills during
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school
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 time
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 as mathematics. If they are less than
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years
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 old, as fifteen
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 old, they will not have enough time to educate and practice
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 base science to
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an academic
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 career.
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,
eighteen
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years
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 old is not
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appropriate
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an appropriate
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 time to maturity, but
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 relevant
age
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 to going
university
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to university
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. In conclusion, I personally take the view that 18
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 old is the best
age
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 to gain adequate knowledge to choose career fields or academic education.
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