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Write a personal exemption for visa exemption in Australia

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I am Nabadawa Vithanage Gayan Hemantha, Passport bearer of N6622951, a CPA, Chartered Accountant and
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 MPA holder from Central Queensland University. I am working as an Accountant
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 Mega Lifesciences (Australia) Pty Ltd since
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 of February 2020 to date. Mega Lifesciences is a TGA certified manufacturer, producing high-quality pharmaceutical products to the Australian and international market. As an Accountant, I am bearing overall responsibility for the financial health of a group, producing financial reports, and developing strategies based on financial research and establishing the financial stability of the group.
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, the company is an essential services provider, my presence in Australia is now required for them to handle the business smoothly and
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P.P. Weerasinghe is
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MBS
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 holder from
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 of Colombo and completed her Bachelor’s in Management stream. Now she is working as a senior executive in TOYOTA
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 since 2016 to date as
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 and administrator of the department. Based on
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 details I would like to request your kind consideration of our visa exemption in
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