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the best way to ensure the growth of the children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #children #parents #courses
Some people believe that if
parents
 participate in parenting
courses
, they will have the right way to bring up their
children
. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 notion and I will give some reasons below.
First
 of all,
parents
 who take parenting
courses
 will be equipped with important skills and knowledge to look after
the
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children
. With the state of
children
 development,
parents
 may encounter many difficulties.
For example
, it seems a pretty
challenges
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 for the
first
-time
parents
 when they take care of the
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newborn
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new born
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newborn
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 infant, from burping the babies to dressing him or
hers
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her
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 to cutting those tiny nails . But with
the
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young adults,
parents
 will face up psychological and physical development, their
misbehavior
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 and so on.
Parents
 need to look for expert advice on what they should do to better understand their
children
 and how to deal with problems.
As a result
, undertaking parenting
courses
is
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 necessary for raising
children
 to ensure
the
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growth of
children
.
On the other hand
, childcare is an innate skill and
parents
 are aware of what is good for their
children
 and what is bad.
For example
, in the past, they do not have the internet, books or any classes but the youngsters still grow up as well. Every
parents
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parent
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 always strive for doing something to do their best and provide for their
children
 instinctively.
Moreover
,
parents
 absolutely ask friends and relatives to be helped. In short, grasping the
children
 by talking or engaging in
regularly
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 activities is better than spending time at these
courses
. In conclusion, parenting
courses
also
 have
its
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their
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 pros and cons. They can make the proper instructions for
parents
. But it is unnecessary and wastes too much time, money. Because no experts can get to know the
children
, except
parents
. Every family is different and so are the situations, challenges in which the child develops. So spending time playing with the young and doing something together is essential for their own upbringing.
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