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the best way to ensure the growth of the children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that if
parents
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 participate in parenting
courses
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, they will have the right way to bring up their
children
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. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
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 notion and I will give some reasons below.
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 of all,
parents
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 who take parenting
courses
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 will be equipped with important skills and knowledge to look after
the
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children
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. With the state of
children
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 development,
parents
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 may encounter many difficulties.
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, it seems a pretty
challenges
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 for the
first
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-time
parents
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 when they take care of the
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newborn
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new born
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 infant, from burping the babies to dressing him or
hers
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her
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 to cutting those tiny nails . But with
the
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young adults,
parents
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 will face up psychological and physical development, their
misbehavior
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 and so on.
Parents
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 need to look for expert advice on what they should do to better understand their
children
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 and how to deal with problems.
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, undertaking parenting
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is
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 necessary for raising
children
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 to ensure
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growth of
children
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.
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, childcare is an innate skill and
parents
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 are aware of what is good for their
children
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 and what is bad.
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, in the past, they do not have the internet, books or any classes but the youngsters still grow up as well. Every
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parents
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 always strive for doing something to do their best and provide for their
children
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 instinctively.
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,
parents
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 absolutely ask friends and relatives to be helped. In short, grasping the
children
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 by talking or engaging in
regularly
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 activities is better than spending time at these
courses
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. In conclusion, parenting
courses
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also
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 have
its
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 pros and cons. They can make the proper instructions for
parents
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. But it is unnecessary and wastes too much time, money. Because no experts can get to know the
children
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, except
parents
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. Every family is different and so are the situations, challenges in which the child develops. So spending time playing with the young and doing something together is essential for their own upbringing.

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