Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class. Self study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some masses believe that learning in

class

is not essential for adults,

self

study

is sufficient and profitable for them. I totally disagree with the

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notion, because to

gain

knowledge

and experience

class

study

as well as

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the self

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self

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study

is important.

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will articulate both the coins of the side along with my perception.

First

and foremost, education is an imperative part of our life. To earn new

skills

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necessary to take experience

knowledge

from some experts.

For instance

, if an

enginner

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engineer

want to learn

knowledge

about

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skills

, its crucial for him to attend

mangement

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management

classes

gain

overall experience in management.

Also

, adults have

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to attend

part time

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classes

if they are interested in joining. In

classes

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peer groups

helps

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each other to overcome difficulties and mistakes. Albeit, adults have enough maturity to

gain

knowledge

by themself by reading books or by browsing on

internet

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, but pointing our mistakes and furnishing our

skills

can be done in

classes

only. A good mentor is always needed to guide us in a proper way.

Furthermore

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study

effecient

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efficient

only when we

gain

all the

knowledge

from our experts.

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our onus to do

self

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study

and to keep

ourself

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updated.

Self

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study

is vital for our personal

developement

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development

. To sum up. it can be reiterated that

self

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study

is a part of our

study

programme but to enhance our

skills

, an individual adult

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class

. In a nutshell,

class

education

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, as well as self study,

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self

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self-study

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study

plays

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same ground role in terms of its importance.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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