Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class. Self study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some masses believe that learning in
class
is not essential for adults,
self
study
is sufficient and profitable for them. I totally disagree with the
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notion, because to
gain
knowledge
and experience
class
study
as well as
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self
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study
is important.
This
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will articulate both the coins of the side along with my perception.
First
and foremost, education is an imperative part of our life. To earn new
skills
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necessary to take experience
knowledge
from some experts.
For instance
, if an
enginner
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engineer
want to learn
knowledge
about
manging
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skills
, its crucial for him to attend
mangement
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management
classes
to
gain
overall experience in management.
Also
, adults have
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to attend
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classes
if they are interested in joining. In
classes
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peer groups
helps
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each other to overcome difficulties and mistakes. Albeit, adults have enough maturity to
gain
knowledge
by themself by reading books or by browsing on
internet
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, but pointing our mistakes and furnishing our
skills
can be done in
classes
only. A good mentor is always needed to guide us in a proper way.
Furthermore
,
self
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study
is
effecient
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efficient
only when we
gain
all the
knowledge
from our experts.
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our onus to do
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study
and to keep
ourself
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updated.
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study
is vital for our personal
developement
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development
. To sum up. it can be reiterated that
self
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study
is a part of our
study
programme but to enhance our
skills
, an individual adult
need
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a
class
. In a nutshell,
class
education
as well as
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, as well as self study,
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self
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study
plays
a
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same ground role in terms of its importance.
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