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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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There are some single-sex schools existing around the world, but not in a large quantity. I think mixed-sex school is better for students to improve themselves and is sexual equality.
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 accepting equal numbers of male and female in every
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gender
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 equality in
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universities
, but I disagree that we should
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 the number of male and female in every
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 of all, the main consideration is that it will increase the difficulty of student enrollment. Male and female are thinking in a different manner, which is why their strength subjects are different.
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, males often view from
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practical
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physics
 or physical
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, but females are from the emotional sides and good at humanities
subject
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, it is hard to keep
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 man and woman in the same
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,
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the
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rate of
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a subjects
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 will decrease the quality of the
class
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. As mention above, male and female are having different strengthens, and their professional levels are different on average. Trying to create equal
gender
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 numbers
class
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 will only reduce the general education performance
becasue
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because
 the lecturer feel
challenge
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 to introduce more
futher
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further
 knowledge. What's more, it is inequality that one study hard to receive the
desire
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 offer but another in
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 easier way
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because
 of his or her
gender
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. It will create
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 unfair atmosphere around a
class
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 or reduce the enthusiasm of pre-college students. Overall, universities should not keep
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equal numbers of male and female in every
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. It will degrade the quality of
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class
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 and demotivate students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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