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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
There are some single-sex schools existing around the world, but not in a large quantity. I think mixed-sex school is better for students to improve themselves and is sexual equality.
Although
 accepting equal numbers of male and female in every
subject
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gender
 equality in
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universities
, but I disagree that we should
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 the number of male and female in every
subject
.
First
 of all, the main consideration is that it will increase the difficulty of student enrollment. Male and female are thinking in a different manner, which is why their strength subjects are different.
For example
, males often view from
pratical
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practical
 sides are good at
physisc
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physics
 or physical
subject
, but females are from the emotional sides and good at humanities
subject
.
Therefore
, it is hard to keep
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 number
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 man and woman in the same
subject
.
Moreover
,
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the
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rate of
gender
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 will decrease the quality of the
class
. As mention above, male and female are having different strengthens, and their professional levels are different on average. Trying to create equal
gender
 numbers
class
 will only reduce the general education performance
becasue
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because
 the lecturer feel
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 to introduce more
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further
 knowledge. What's more, it is inequality that one study hard to receive the
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 offer but another in
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 easier way
becasue
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because
 of his or her
gender
. It will create
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 unfair atmosphere around a
class
 or reduce the enthusiasm of pre-college students. Overall, universities should not keep
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equal numbers of male and female in every
subject
. It will degrade the quality of
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 and demotivate students.
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