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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I mostly agree with
this
 statement. I think the British government urgently needs to introduce laws to reduce traffic, along with developing some new forms of transport. Nowadays the roads are very busy and there is too much traffic.
This
 applies not only to Britain
,
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 but globally. One
alternative
 to
cars
 is public transportation,
such
 as trains, buses and subways. If these are efficient, reliable and affordable,
people
 can
use
 them as alternatives to
cars
. But if they are unreliable or too expensive, which are common complaints about public transport in Britain,
people
 will end up using
cars
instead
. So my suggestion is the government spends tax from car users on
alternative
 forms of transport. But one problem is, public transportation is not always ideal.
For example
, buses, subways and trains are very busy in rush hour.
Also
, if a person’s home is very far away from the bus stop or station, they cannot
use
 it. So there should be enough bus stops, stations etc. I think fuel is a very important issue these days. Because air pollution has become a serious issue in many urban
areas
, and
also
 oil is running out. So we should start to
use
 electric
cars
, trains, etc.
Also
, governments should make it easy for
people
 to
use
 bicycles, electric scooters and so on because they are cheap, healthy and clean.
However
, despite these considerations, it is important to remember that for some
areas
, there is no
alternative
 to car ownership and usage.
This
 is particularly true of rural
areas
, where it would be too expensive and wasteful to provide a lot of public transportation.
People
 in many rural
areas
 have no
alternative
 but to own
cars
.
Therefore
this
 must be considered when introducing any legislation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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